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Title: The last kiss
Author:
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Rating: PG

Characters: Jacob/Edward
Word count: 100
Warnings: None
Disclaimer: I do not own Twilight, Stephenie Meyer does. I don't make money from this writing.
Summary: Edward's last kiss before the wedding.












My lips touch soft ones, trying to prolong the moment. This will be the last kiss we'll ever share. I look at those dark eyes I used to love so much, eyes that first looked at me with skepticism and later with love.

My fingers caress those smooth, sculpted cheeks, tracing a path to the silky dark hair I've played with so many times. I try to dismiss the raging thoughts of jealousy that fill Jake's mind.

Nodding solemnly, I rush to say the words that will forever break a heart.

"Bella, it's Jacob I love. I'm so, so sorry."




Date: 2012-01-18 02:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] acaranna.livejournal.com
Heartachingly beautiful.

And at first one could think it's Jacob that Edward says Good-Bye to. I'm glad that it's Bella though.

Lovely work. :)

Date: 2012-01-18 02:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] herumtreiber.livejournal.com
The descriptions could apply to Jake, but it's Bella who receives the last kiss :)

Thank you!



Date: 2012-01-18 03:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jeri-1116.livejournal.com
Heartbreaking. I thought for sure it was Jake he was talking too. Nicely done.

Date: 2012-01-18 03:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] herumtreiber.livejournal.com
Edward is filled with remorse, but it's Jake he loves.

Thank you very much!

Date: 2012-01-18 09:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkonwaterbabe.livejournal.com
nice twist ending

Date: 2012-01-18 09:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] herumtreiber.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

Date: 2012-01-19 04:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wirrrn.livejournal.com

Awesome. Evil and awesome. Went in a completely different direction from where I thought it was heading. Loooooove it!

Date: 2012-01-19 01:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] herumtreiber.livejournal.com
Thank you very much!! Poor Bella will be so disappointed ;)

Date: 2012-01-20 04:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lovemochi.livejournal.com
The ending made me smile.

Date: 2012-01-20 01:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] herumtreiber.livejournal.com
Thank you! I had fun writing it, especially the ending.

Date: 2012-03-03 07:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fairygodmother9.livejournal.com
How a few sentences can tell an entire story! Lovely

Date: 2012-03-03 08:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] herumtreiber.livejournal.com
Thank you! Edward really had a hard time letting Bella go, I loved writing it.

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