Twilight haiku: At the crossroads

[herumtreiber]

Title: At the crossroads
Author: herumtreiber 
Rating: PG-13
Fandom: Twilight
Characters: Edward/Jacob
Warnings: None
Disclaimer: I do not own Twilight, Stephenie Meyer does. Nor do I make any money from writing the haiku.





Rustling winter trees,
sound like a sweet melody,
my wolf approaches.

Comments

[wirrrn.livejournal.com]

Short and sweet. I like it!

[herumtreiber.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Edward has waited long for Jake :)

[flea-collar.livejournal.com]

I thought you need a dash or a colon for a haiku? Do commas work? Just wondering. I stopped writing haikus because the poetry students get all upset if you do them the American-school-taught way.

[herumtreiber.livejournal.com]

It works with a comma. I researched haikus in Spanish, French and German too. The rules are not as inflexible as they seem to think.

In researching a reply to a French critic, I found out that the Japanese masters themselves would break the syllables rules from time to time :)

[flea-collar.livejournal.com]

Well the syllables rule is very different in Japan then it is in America because on is different than a syllable. I couldn't even really figure out what an on was or could be so it broke my brain. :( Well anyway I still liked the haiku even if I don't know what one really is!

[herumtreiber.livejournal.com]

Don't let them discourage you! It's supposed to be 5-7-5 syllables.

And the punctuation marks? This haiku by Jack Kerouac doesn't have any:

Snow in my shoe
Abandoned
Sparrow's nest





Follow your instincts :)

[flea-collar.livejournal.com]

Maybe. I don't know it's like any art you have to know the rules before you can break them and I just don't know the rules yet. I like prose better anyway.

[herumtreiber.livejournal.com]

You're right, it's a bit difficult. Prose gives one a lot more room.

[flea-collar.livejournal.com]

Prose is good about that. I am so glad that the romantic era took place the novel was invented. The bryonic hero was created which is more or less Edward, or any modern fantasy hero. So yay!
I just wish I wasn't too worried about posting my stuff.

[herumtreiber.livejournal.com]

Yes, Edward fits the byronic hero image pretty well.

I guess every author goes at their own pace.

[tedreo.livejournal.com]

i can put this into my mind and play how this scene is

[herumtreiber.livejournal.com]

Thanks! Edward loves melodies :)